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IELTS Writing Task 2 Sample Band 5 | IELTS Essay Sample Band 5
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The essay addresses the task but lacks a clear thesis statement and logical flow. Grammar and vocabulary usage are basic, with several errors affecting clarity and coherence.
| Overall score | 5.0 | |
| Grammatical range and accuracy | 5.0 | |
| Lexical resource | 5.0 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 5.0 | |
| Task response | 5.0 |
| Total Errors | 34 | |
| Grammatical range and accuracy | 10 | |
| Lexical resource | 14 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 5 | |
| Task response | 5 |
Question
In many countries, governments spend significant resources on promoting national culture through festivals, museums, and public television programs.
What are the advantages and disadvantages of governments promoting national culture?
#Culture
#Advantage / Disadvantage
Submitted Answer
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Words:233
Paragraphs:5
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Thesis Statement
governments
spend
significant resources
on promoting national culture
through festivals, museums, and public television programs.Missing Linking Devices
governments
promoting national culture
?On the one
hand
by spending
resources
on public things like television programs will increase
the social activity. Increasing
the positive atmospher
of society will cause
better work performance and individuals feel more energyc
for daily activities. For example
countries who has
more
cimean
and festivals people
are more
happy
. Increasing
the people
motivation will lead to a bubbly and healthy society in which individuals are able to have remarkable role in their life.More
over spending
the resources
on public events will cause
lack of budget for governments
and catastrophic economic
problems, if
it is not managed well. It also can cause
inflation and reduce the economic
growth. By damaging to the economic
people
will suffer and have to work more
and more. This will cause
the increasing
trend of anxiety between people
.In other words
not only the culture
would be damaged but also the society will face problems. For example
some countries who spend
their resource
on culture
are facing economic
growth every year without return of their investment.In
conclusion
it is beneficial if governments
spend
mony
on social events like festivals or museums to promote the culture
, however other aspects of economic
should be considered to avoid any problems.