IELTS Writing Task 2 Sample Band 5
IELTS Essay Sample Band 5
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The essay addresses the task but lacks clarity and coherence in some parts. Grammar and vocabulary usage are adequate but contain errors and could be more varied.
| Overall score | 5.0 | |
| Grammatical range and accuracy | 5.0 | |
| Lexical resource | 5.0 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 5.0 | |
| Task response | 5.0 |
| Total Errors | 39 | |
| Grammatical range and accuracy | 16 | |
| Lexical resource | 16 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 3 | |
| Task response | 4 |
Question
Cities around the world are facing significant issues with overcrowding on buses, trains, and trams, especially during peak hours.
Discuss the problems of overcrowding in public transportation and suggest solutions to alleviate this issue.
#Public Transport
#Problem / Solution
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Thesis Statement
cities
around the world, overcrowding in every means of public
transportation during office hours
is becoming a rising issue. This is because of unamaged
public
transport
service and can be mitigated through proper management and promoting bicycles
can be more advantageous.Office
hours
, mainly the time
between nine to eleven
in the morning and four to six in the evening
is the time
when students go to their school, college and others to their job
. So, at this time
the roads and the public
vehicles
, both become really occupied. Not everyone can afford getting
a private vehicle
and they must travel in public
transport
. While public
transports
are
not well managed in many cities
. Problems
of timing, less number
of seats
, not allocated seat
for people
with special needs and less number
of public
vehicles
are major unmanaged problems
. For instance, if someone takes
public
vehicle
during peak hours
, one can see majority of
people
are standing because of occupied seats
. Moreover, one can see an elderly person standing while youngsters sitting in seat
are busy on their phone. But, there is another problem
if very people
in the city
gets private vehicles
. This will again cause more and more number
of vehicles
on the road at certain time
. Which will result in traffic.However, these
problems
can be minimized if government
and other concerned bodies take
action over it. To solve these problems
, they should increase the number
of public
vehicles
with proper allocated seats
and manage vehicle
timing. Another great solution can be promoting the use of bicycles
. This is eco-friendly and is good
way to remain fit even with the busy schedule. Also, this will not cause problem
of traffic. For example, many cities
are following the slogan 'Go Green' and are encouraging people
to ride bicycles
.In conclusion, the arising
problem
of overcrowded public
transport
can be minimized if, concerned authorities take
action for it's
management and encourages
the use of bicycle
.