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IELTS Writing Task 2 Sample Band 6 | IELTS Essay Sample Band 6
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The essay addresses the task but lacks depth in discussing both advantages and disadvantages, and the ideas are not fully developed. Grammar and vocabulary are adequate but could benefit from more variety and precision to enhance clarity and coherence.
| Overall score | 6.0 | |
| Grammatical range and accuracy | 6.0 | |
| Lexical resource | 5.0 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 6.0 | |
| Task response | 6.0 |
| Total Errors | 25 | |
| Grammatical range and accuracy | 2 | |
| Lexical resource | 14 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 4 | |
| Task response | 5 |
Question
In many countries, governments spend significant resources on promoting national culture through festivals, museums, and public television programs.
What are the advantages and disadvantages of governments promoting national culture?
#Culture
#Advantage / Disadvantage
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Thesis Statement
culture
and history is very important
for many governments. It is very helpful for growing-ups, local people
, and future generations in their country
for learning and saving it. People
can learn and save culture
by showing at festivals
, museums
, and public
television
.It is
very important
to protect and promote
for people
the national
culture
for each country
, and this can only be done by holding demonstrations. Therefore, it would be great to promote
on public
television
, and by doing this, other countries
' populations can show this culture
, and they may be interested in this culture
. As a result, they can visit your country
to study and show their own eyes, and it is economically useful.On the other hand, a
country
can create and perpetuate its history by promoting
it to the people
through festivals
, museums
, and public
television
shows. For example, if no one uses national
culture
, it is forgotten. As a result, the cultures
begin to change or disappear. In contrast, national
cultures
can be developed and protected if they are promoted
to the public and displayed through any kind of exhibition.In conclusion, in my
country
, our traditional culture
is demonstrated by entertainment festivals
, historical museums
, televisions
, and social media, and from my point of view
, I agree with the presentation of national
culture
through festivals
, museums
, and public
television
.