IELTS Essay Checker - Sample Band 5.5
IELTS Writing Task 2 Sample Band 5.5 | IELTS Essay Sample Band 5.5
5.5
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15 Jul 24, 09:40
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Overall Feedback
The essay addresses the task but has several grammatical errors and lacks coherence in some parts. Vocabulary usage is adequate but could be more varied, and the ideas need better development and logical flow.
| Overall score | 5.5 | |
| Grammatical range and accuracy | 5.0 | |
| Lexical resource | 5.0 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 5.0 | |
| Task response | 6.0 |
| Total Errors | 23 | |
| Grammatical range and accuracy | 5 | |
| Lexical resource | 9 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 4 | |
| Task response | 5 |
Question
Technology offers innovative ways to preserve and share cultural heritage, but there is a concern that it might lead to a dependency that could diminish direct engagement with culture.
To what extent do you agree or disagree that the use of technology in cultural preservation is becoming too pervasive, potentially diminishing real cultural engagement?
#Culture
#Agree / Disagree
Submitted Answer
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Words:165
Paragraphs:2
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Thesis Statement
be disagree
with the argument that is stated the use of technology
in cultural
preservation is becoming too pervasive, potentially diminishing real cultural
engagement. It is because technology
will help people all over the world learn the cultural
heritage without any presence on site. It assits
the preservation of the culture
itself. By using the technology
, the existance
of the culture
will be maintained from extinction due to the improvement of people's awareness. By the knowledge of those specific cultural
heritage, the wilingness
to explore the place or culture
directly will be increased. Futhermore
, it will be potentially developing
the real cultural
engagement.For instance, 3D
technology
in one of the biggest Buddhist Temple in Asia, Borobudur Temple, improves Indonesia's tourism income from 4.5 Billion to 6 Billion Rupiahs per year. With that data, it concludes the the
use of technology
in cultural
preservation will up scale the inquisitive
of tourists to feel closely with the culture
and experience it.