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IELTS Writing Task 2 Sample Band 5 | IELTS Essay Sample Band 5
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The essay addresses the task but lacks depth in discussing the effects on society and has several grammatical errors. Coherence and cohesion are affected by unclear transitions, and vocabulary usage is limited with some informal expressions.
| Overall score | 5.0 | |
| Grammatical range and accuracy | 5.0 | |
| Lexical resource | 5.0 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 5.0 | |
| Task response | 5.0 |
| Total Errors | 35 | |
| Grammatical range and accuracy | 13 | |
| Lexical resource | 14 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 4 | |
| Task response | 4 |
Writing Task
#Business & Money
#Discussion
High salaries can attract top talent, which potentially leads to better company performance. However, large wage disparities can create social tensions and feelings of injustice among workers.
Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of high salaries and wage disparities. What effects do they have on society?
Submitted Answer
Words256|Paragraphs4
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Paragraph 1 Issues:
Thesis Statement
results
to
better company
performance
. Although this does improve overall performance
, it tends to create problems socially amongst
workers
.As workplaces and
business
tend to be competitive, companies
higher
only the best of the best
as this plays a vital role in overall
performance
of the business. The more set or skills and better results also
come at a cost. Companies
would increase their pay if it would benefit them. This would also
increase competitiveness as other
employees would work
harder as to be able to acquire the same salary as a skilled one
which would also
help in advancing their skills.On the
other
hand
this could also
put off other
workers
as it would feel unfair to get paid less while working
the same position. This could
also
cause
other
workers
to feel as
tho
they are not as
usefull
as well demotivate them as they could feel as they are not getting paid enough for the work they
do
which could result
to
them
working
their bare minimum.
This can cause jealousy amonst
the work force
which could lead to more issues towards the future.Although it may cause issues within a work environment, people
work
hard for their talent and should be paid accordingly for their level of skills. In order to obtain the best final product, a company
must be at their top requirements and these require top talent, and its
only right to increase a salary based of
a workers
performance
.