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The essay provides a personal opinion and some examples, but lacks coherence and cohesion, with ideas not fully developed or logically organized. Grammar and vocabulary usage are basic, with several errors affecting clarity and formality is inconsistent.
| Overall score | 5.0 | |
| Grammatical range and accuracy | 5.0 | |
| Lexical resource | 5.0 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 5.0 | |
| Task response | 5.0 |
| Total Errors | 28 | |
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| Lexical resource | 12 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 8 | |
| Task response | 4 |
Writing Task
#Globalisation
#Agree / Disagree
Globalisation is often credited with the creation of job opportunities through new markets and investments. Conversely, it is blamed for job displacements due to companies relocating their operations to countries with cheaper labor.
Do you agree or disagree that globalisation creates more job opportunities than it displaces?
Submitted Answer
Words279|Paragraphs7
English:
Global Issues:
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Paragraph 1 Issues:
Thesis Statement
job
opportunities
through new markets and investments. Although there are many positive aspects, various industries have had to relocate themselves. As a country
gets
more globalized, taxes and burdens tend to rise gradually. This could get
the companies in great economical hustle and can even get
them to go bankrupt. In order to avoid it, there
a tons
of intellectuals on it.Paragraph 2 Issues:
Missing Linking Devices
globalisation
can bring job
opportunities
, specially if the places where the industries are located in developing countries
.Paragraph 3 Issues:
Missing Linking Devices
countries
that have been globalized through time, are facing great economical
success.There are
job
opportunities
rising daily, for example, Dubai, which used to be a desertic African
country
with little to no employment, started to rise in terms of
economical
growth after its globalization, and it is among the richest and most visited
countries
in the whole world.
Certain amount of people have negative responses to globalization, saying that it is affecting the lives of low-class people who lose their
job
when these companies relocate themselves, while
other
think that it brings nothing but improvement, increasing their employment-rate and modernizing the
countries
generally.
I agree with the idea that
globalisation
creates more
job
opportunities
than it displaces, this thanks to the fact that, the
countries
who lose these
job
opportunities
are first-world, such as, The United States of America, Canada, Germany, France, etc., and the
countries
whose people
get
to have more chances to
get
a
job
, are the developing ones.
Although it has some negative effects on the world too, these are less of it than positive ones.