IELTS Writing Task 2 Sample Band 5.5
IELTS Essay Sample Band 5.5
5.5
Overall Score
13 Jul 24, 08:01
Want to practice?
Try this question
Overall Feedback
The essay addresses the question but lacks clarity and coherence. Grammar and vocabulary usage need improvement, and the ideas should be more logically developed and supported with examples.
| Overall score | 5.5 | |
| Grammatical range and accuracy | 5.0 | |
| Lexical resource | 5.0 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 5.0 | |
| Task response | 6.0 |
| Total Errors | 38 | |
| Grammatical range and accuracy | 8 | |
| Lexical resource | 23 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 3 | |
| Task response | 4 |
Question
As mass communication and transport continue to grow, societies are becoming more and more alike leading to a phenomenon known as globalisation. Some people fear that globalisation will inevitably lead to the total loss of cultural identity.
What are the primary reasons for losing cultural identity, and what can be done to protect it in our globalised world?
#Globalisation
#Problem / Solution
Submitted Answer
English:
Words:290
Paragraphs:4
Formality
Task Response
Readability
Coherence
Cohesion
Vocabulary Usage
Grammar Range
Ideas Development
Logical Flow
Thesis Statement
worlwide
burning issues in the globe. Gradually all of the remote areas of the whole world are turning into a global village and as a result
the fear of losing their own
cultural identity
is on top.Almost most of the
socities
are becoming more and more modernized and industriliazatied
. Moreover
it is evident that all the infrastructure of development like communication and transportation are skyrocketing dramatically. Furthermore, due to having more
and more
facilites
people
are being attracted to the western culture and tradition rather than preserving their own
identity
. People
are following more
and more
other
countries's
living style. Due to recent drastical
development in communication people
have been attracted by social medias
and start to adapting what they have seen on social media. As a result
this activity directly plays a great role on extinction of our owm
identity
and dignity.Inorder to promote our
own
dignity we should wisely use the facilites
we have got. Despite of
following all the things we have seen on social platforms and other
, we should refinely
adapt them in our daily life. However
we should update and upgrade our othrodoxical
thoughts rather than applying other
westerner's thoughts and letting our norms and values to be explicted
.Both the government and
people
of different community should join hands in hands in
order to preserve their own
identity
. People
should launch different cultural programs to promote their own
culture. Elder should provide factual knowledge about their culture to the younger ones rather than spreading rumours. Younger generation people
should also actively participate and encourages other
people
to save thier
own
dignity. The government should also play it role precisely to save the sovernity
of it's
people
.