IELTS Writing Task 2 Sample Band 5

IELTS Essay Sample Band 5

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Question
Genetic engineering holds the promise of curing genetic diseases and improving human health, but ethical and safety concerns persist.
Evaluate the advantages and disadvantages of genetic engineering in medicine.
#Health
#Advantage / Disadvantage
Submitted Answer
English:UK English
Words:273
Paragraphs:4
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Thesis Statement
Genetic
engineering
is been
in practise for several
years
mostly in European countries.
severe
and genetical
diseases
are
cured
with the help of
genetic
engineering
.
whenever
we
talk about
something
it has both positive
as well as
negative
aspect
so
the
genetic
engineering
also has both sides.
Different genetical disorders and the severe
diseases
which were termed as uncurable
are been
cured
with the practise
pf
genetic
engineering
.
Diseases
like the
colorblindness
, HIV which are
transfered
from the genetics of the family
memebers
were not
cured
by the medicine or any
kind
of the
therapy
but after the development and enhancement of the
genetic
engineering
this is
poosible
to
cure
this
kinds
of
diseases
.
Not only the
diseases
but all the
genetic
disorders can be treated as well as mutated with the help of this tradition.
Genetic
engineering
ensure
that all the
genetic
disorders and
diseases
will be
cured
and improve the
human
health by some
kind
of
modification
on the
human
genetics.
In
contrast
genetic
engineering
is a risky way of treatment.
there
is always the fifty
chance
of
diseases
being
cured
and
sometimes
the
patients
life is also in danger. Doing some
kind
of
genetic
modification
can
leads
toward the end of
human
life as it is not sure whether the
modification
will be
succes
or not.
some
time the
genetic
modification
can
results
development
of some other
kind
of
genetic
diseases
which can be more severe than the previous one.
In conclusion,
Genetic
engineering
is playing the vital role in
curing
the
genetic
diseases
and improving the
human
health however
sometimes
this may be the reason for the
patients
death .