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IELTS Writing Task 2 Sample Band 5 | IELTS Essay Sample Band 5
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The essay addresses the topic but lacks clarity and coherence, with several grammatical errors and awkward phrasing. Vocabulary is limited and repetitive, and the development of ideas is not fully realized, affecting the overall task response.
Overall score | 5.0 | |
Grammatical range and accuracy | 5.0 | |
Lexical resource | 5.0 | |
Coherence & cohesion | 5.0 | |
Task response | 5.0 |
Total Errors | 31 | |
Grammatical range and accuracy | 12 | |
Lexical resource | 11 | |
Coherence & cohesion | 4 | |
Task response | 4 |
Question
Despite progress, gender inequality remains a pressing issue worldwide, hindering social and economic development.
What are the main factors contributing to gender inequality, and what steps should be taken to promote gender equality?
#Society
#Problem / Solution
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Thesis Statement
equality
has making
a great improvement in terms of fighting for its acceptance worldwide. However, despite of
the success, unfairness seems noticeable that impedes social and economic progress. While I believe that there are main reasons leading to gender
inequality, there should some ways to naturalise gender
equality
.There are a number of significant factors leading to
gender
inequality. Many people are dwelling in the past, believing that certain skills are only meant to
one's gender
. The reason for this perspective is that a task may not result better if it is not done by a specific human being. For example
, we always believe that women are good in doing
household chores rather than men. Hence, many individual
will make
judgement when they see the set up
of husband and wife doing the opposite job. Another point is that most company shows
biased when hiring employees. This is one characteristic that ruin
the economic progress . Those who are in driving organisation, are stricter in hiring drivers, as a result they will only allow men when looking for drivers.In recent years, we felt some changes of just for both male and female. However, it does not suffice, the country that we live in should implement fairness regardless of its
gender
. If the government, implement a rule that all jobseekers can make
an application of their liking, this will not only improve the economic growth but
it will also help the family's well-being. Another way is that showing
equality
to all human being should be seen through commercials in the television
or in the internet
. By showing
good examples
, our social development will e
even better.For example
, in Singapore, people are allowed to take the role of men staying at home rather than women.In conclusion, in order to achieve
gender
equality
we must exemplify important measures such as the government play an important role to
make
one's
gender
can seek a job
despite of
the
gender
and also by
showing
good
examples
to the public, this would greatly help our social status to be
upront
without awkward issues.