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The essay addresses the task but lacks depth in exploring social issues and solutions, with limited examples. Grammar and vocabulary are basic, with errors in sentence structure and word choice affecting clarity and coherence.

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Grammatical range and accuracy	5.0
Lexical resource	5.0
Coherence & cohesion	5.0
Task response	5.0

Writing Task

#Tourism

#Problem / Solution

While tourism can be a source of income, it can also lead to social issues such as displacement of local populations and changes in traditional lifestyles.

What social issues arise from tourism and what measures can be taken to address them?

Submitted Answer

Words272|Paragraphs4

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Paragraph 1 Issues:

Thesis Statement

From the ancient

time

, there are a lot of

tourism

places

across

world

, which are magnificent and beautiful. All different

places

have their own values and interesting history. Increment in

tourism

is a favourable aspect for the government to create a good source of income. However, sometimes it affects adverse on

local

population

and

gradually it can

be threaten

to traditional values.

Paragraph 2 Issues:

Missing Linking Devices

I would like to state the point which is strongly connected with

economy

of the country.

Tourism

is a sort of employment for the

local

people

, which gives them

boost

to run their

lives

without financial crises. Whatever expenses tourists

are spending

during their trips, which is a major part of earning for the

government

and use that fund to develop and protect those

places

Simeltuneously

, need to focus on other issues like traditional values of that

place

and how

local

people

lives

are getting affected.

tourism

places

, we can always find a diverse

polulation

from different countries, states with various languages and their

life

styles

. Moreover,

it's

hard

to understand the customs and rituals of

local

place

and

sometimes

they

disrepsect

the culture,

local

people

changes

their way of

life

by observing them.

Another

factors

are like relation with

local

person, marriages can affect their traditional lifestyle. Also,

local

people

are getting influenced by tourists and

try

to change

theirselves

. Many times things came up that tourists make the

place

more dirty, they damage the

hisotrical

places

, which are destructive step from them.

Thus,

tourism

is most beneficial for the government, at the same time it can be a threat to the

local

tradition and culture.

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Total Errors	37
Grammatical range and accuracy	14
Lexical resource	15
Coherence & cohesion	4
Task response	4