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The essay addresses the task but lacks depth in exploring both advantages and disadvantages, and contains several grammatical errors. Coherence and cohesion are affected by unclear transitions, and vocabulary usage is limited with some repetition.
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Writing Task

#Culture
#Advantage / Disadvantage
In many countries, governments spend significant resources on promoting national culture through festivals, museums, and public television programs.
What are the advantages and disadvantages of governments promoting national culture?

Submitted Answer

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Festivals, museums and even public television programs are what a
country
known
worldwide as this can be considered as a
tourist
spot. There are
a lot factors
that can be beneficial
promoting
national
culture
; Firstly, it helps the nation to be
known
worldwide. It let the
people
around the world learn one's
culture
from a different perspective. Secondly, a used to be unpopular place to visit can
become
a
tourist
spot just by promoting it effectively. Lastly, it helps the economy of one's own
country
. Tons of businessmen will see the positive side of a
country
with a lot of
tourist
. Hence, a bright future will be open for the locals as there will be
alot
of job employment waiting and seeking for the
oppurtunity
.
Let us use Korea as an example of a successful and effective promotion of national
culture
. Korea has never been the same when they launch
Korean
Pop Culture also
known
as "KPOP" they were
known
for exhibiting idols with extravagant look and distinct clothes that
people
nowadays can identify as
korean
clothes. Furthermore, their
korean
drama or K-Drama
became
a hit as well for a
high quality
acting, plot and even cameraworks that
people
from the other side of the world
can't
get enough of it. With their
Korean
Drama being
acknowledge
from all over the world, it gave Korea a platform where they can introduce their
culture
and
tourist
spots with everyone. With that,
people
all over the place
became
intrigue and started visiting the
country
itself. Soon after, Korean
became
widely
known
and been
acknowledge
everywhere.

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