IELTS Writing Task 2 Sample Band 5.5
IELTS Essay Sample Band 5.5
5.5
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The essay addresses the question but lacks depth in idea development and coherence. Grammar and vocabulary usage are adequate but could be improved for better clarity and precision.
| Overall score | 5.5 | |
| Grammatical range and accuracy | 5.0 | |
| Lexical resource | 5.0 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 6.0 | |
| Task response | 6.0 |
| Total Errors | 31 | |
| Grammatical range and accuracy | 9 | |
| Lexical resource | 13 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 4 | |
| Task response | 5 |
Question
The struggle to maintain a healthy work-life balance can significantly affect family time, often leading to strained relationships.
What are the main reasons for poor work-life balance affecting family life, and what strategies could be implemented to improve family time?
#Family
#Problem / Solution
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Words:340
Paragraphs:4
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Thesis Statement
Family
relationships can be influenced by the poor work
-life
balance
which could lead to a tension between family
members. The main reasons for this are stress, money problems
and bad time
managing skills. Possible solutions of
these problems
will be discussed in this essay
.To start with the
problems
that cause poor work
-life
balance
, the most common one is the lack of money. People who have big families
with children work
long hours to support their loved ones but don't
have any energy or time
to spend time
with them afterwards. To solve this problem
it is essential to get your priorities straight, to communicate to the family
members about the pressure of providing for the family
, and to find a compromise together. Another issue is bad time
managing skills. Not everyone is organized when it comes to planning the schedule for the day. Some people get distracted easily
especially those who have ADHD. For example, when I start my working
day on a laptop, I sometimes spend 30 minutes just reading the news feed or watching videos because it is very addictive. Thus, I have to prolong my working
hours to get all the job done
and that leads to lesser time
for my family
.One of the possible solutions to distractions at
work
can be: first, undertand
how your brain works
. It might be good for you to learn to trick yourself. What I mean is that if it is hard
to concentrate
just do it in small steps. For instance, 30 minutes of work
and 5 minutes of rest etc. Eventually, one will become more organized in their work
and find time
for their family
that way.On
balance
, setting one's priorities straight in life
is very important
. Earning money is very difficult but necessary to lead a normal, comfortable life
but
it is as important to take time
for our wives, husbands and children, give them attention
and love they deserve. Learning time
managing skills is essential to maintain life
-work
balance
.