IELTS Essay Checker - Sample Band 5

IELTS Writing Task 2 Sample Band 5 | IELTS Essay Sample Band 5

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04 Apr 25, 20:57
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The essay presents a personal opinion and an example, but lacks clarity and coherence in its argumentation. Grammatical errors and limited vocabulary usage affect the overall readability and task achievement.
Overall score5.0
Grammatical range and accuracy5.0
Lexical resource5.0
Coherence & cohesion5.0
Task response5.0
Total Errors29
Grammatical range and accuracy7
Lexical resource11
Coherence & cohesion6
Task response5

Writing Task

#Youth Crime
#Agree / Disagree
The best way to reduce youth crimes is to educate their parents with parental skills.
To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Submitted Answer

Words198|Paragraphs4
English:US English
Global Issues:
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Task Response
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Coherence
Cohesion
Vocabulary Usage
Grammar Range
Ideas Development
Logical Flow
Paragraph 1 Issues:
Missing Linking Devices
Thesis Statement
Family, friends and
environment
are things that will model a human being to grow up in a certain way.
Paragraph 2 Issues:
Missing Linking Devices
Nowadays, youth crime has been becoming more and more recurrent, crimes that may seem ''
innofensive
'
' like stealing something
unexpensive
may lead to more fraudulent ones in the future, like
felonyes
.
At my own
point of view
, the education since infancy is crucial,
it's
the start where parents may commit mistakes that may mark an after and a before, furthermore, it does not all
relly
on the education.
On the other hand, there are opinions that remark that wherever a child is raised to be perfect, if they are
destinated
to end up horribly, they will
no
matter what.
The traditional model of family
doesn't
always work, a famous case that support this idea is ''Gypsy Rose
'
' a girl who was raised by a mother who needed her daughter to be perfect, and took the traditional education to another level, Gypsy claimed to be done with her mother's style of educating and ended up killing her own mother, she got her sentence and claimed that ''If a parent
isn't
educated properly, neither will their children be
'
'.

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