IELTS Writing Task 2 Sample Band 5
IELTS Essay Sample Band 5
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The essay addresses the question but lacks clarity and coherence. Grammar and vocabulary usage are basic, with several errors affecting readability. More structured arguments and better examples are needed for higher scores.
| Overall score | 5.0 | |
| Grammatical range and accuracy | 5.0 | |
| Lexical resource | 5.0 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 5.0 | |
| Task response | 5.0 |
| Total Errors | 27 | |
| Grammatical range and accuracy | 7 | |
| Lexical resource | 11 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 5 | |
| Task response | 4 |
Question
Balancing the rights of victims and offenders presents a complex challenge for the criminal justice system. Ensuring justice and fairness for both parties is crucial for the system's integrity.
Do you agree or disagree that the criminal justice system currently maintains a fair balance between the rights of victims and the rights of offenders?
#Criminal Justice
#Agree / Disagree
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the integrity and social justice. I strongly agree with that current law system which they have the right
to speak their rights
.Offenders
may be being caught of an act of criminal. They are sentenced to jail or pay some fine. In our modern world, offenders
can seek law assistance from their lawyers
. It may seems
strange for people why do offenders
get
a
lawyers
? Do they want to prove themselves as not guilty in the court? The answer is no because
they hire the lawyers
to get
their rights
. For instance, in 2012 there was a man that he was allegedly kicked the woman. He acknowledged that he was attacking the woman in the gas station. But later on, he went to his lawyers
that he didn't
intend to attack or steal anything that the victim
claimed. He brought his lawyers
and there was a recording that he only punched at her face. From the recording
he didn't
started
the conflict. He was getting
mad because
the woman stractch
his car. The judges
were surprised by this and the judges
still sent him to prison but
the duration was cut.In other hand, the
victims
can sue or ask for a compensation of the damages. They may speak to the judges
that in its lawsuit they lost some of their money or properties. This proves that the victims
should be heard of their rights
being stolen from the offenders
. For example, a man asked the judges
what was the potential damage from the criminal act. They could get
a compensation.Overall, criminal justice system in our modern world is
getting
better than before because
the victims
and the offenders
have the same rights
in the court room
. The offenders
may seek better justice even they were criminals and the victims
could have the compensation.