IELTS Essay Checker - Sample Band 6.5
IELTS Writing Task 2 Sample Band 6.5 | IELTS Essay Sample Band 6.5
6.5
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The essay provides a clear opinion and supports it well, but there are some grammatical errors and awkward phrasing. Coherence and cohesion are good, but transitions between ideas could be smoother. Vocabulary is varied but could be more precise.
| Overall score | 6.5 | |
| Grammatical range and accuracy | 7.0 | |
| Lexical resource | 5.0 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 7.0 | |
| Task response | 7.0 |
| Total Errors | 26 | |
| Grammatical range and accuracy | 4 | |
| Lexical resource | 15 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 4 | |
| Task response | 3 |
Question
In the last few decades there have been more and more cases of famous people being hounded by the press. Some people think that famous people in the media have no right to privacy.
To what extent do you agree?
#Media & Advertising
#Agree / Disagree
Submitted Answer
English:
Words:358
Paragraphs:3
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Every
public
figures
' privacy
has been restricted by the public
as their lives
have been documented
and analyzed by the media, and exploited for personal gain. There has been an argument that by being notable, they must be prepared for the disadvantages of what it takes to be a public
figure
in the public
eye, which includes being photographed by the press wherever they go. However, it was also augmented that if they don't
want their private lives
to be constantly documented
, then they shouldn't
be a celebrity in the first place. Thus, I fully disagree on the standard that public
figures
have no right
to privacy
.Being famous
doesn't
erase their right
to privacy
. Every person's privacy
should be respected, including public
figures
. Celebrities are ordinary citizens just like us, and the only difference we have from them is their influence towards the public
. Their private lives
must not be turned around into gossip that gets thrown around by the media, and their private lives
must not always be documented
by the public
. Constant invasion of personal space does not only compromise their well-being, but also pose a threat for their safety and their loved ones. As people who value their work, we do not have a relationship with them, thus
we are not obligated to be updated about their personal lives
.We must understand that while being passionate about their work, they did not subject themselves to contempt and
explotation
. They may allow photographs to be taken during public
events, but it doesn't
give us the right
to constantly document
their lives
in public
. They did not sign a contract that stated that their privacy
will be restricted. When we see them in public
, we do not take their pictures, but instead we let them live their lives
just as we live ours. In conclusion, every public
figure
has a right
to privacy
because they deserve to navigate their own lives
without constant intrusion, and it is a necessity for their own well-being and safety. Morever
, we must understand privacy
is a universal principal
that doesn't
exceeds
fame.