IELTS Writing Task 2 Sample Band 5.5
IELTS Essay Sample Band 5.5
5.5
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The essay addresses the task but lacks depth in argumentation and examples. Grammar and vocabulary are adequate but could be improved for better clarity and precision.
| Overall score | 5.5 | |
| Grammatical range and accuracy | 5.0 | |
| Lexical resource | 5.0 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 6.0 | |
| Task response | 6.0 |
| Total Errors | 35 | |
| Grammatical range and accuracy | 8 | |
| Lexical resource | 19 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 4 | |
| Task response | 4 |
Question
Educational development initiatives aim to improve literacy and learning outcomes across diverse populations.
Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of educational development initiatives.
#Development
#Advantage / Disadvantage
Submitted Answer
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Thesis Statement
Education
development
is aiming
to improve the literacy levels and learning outcomes among diverse populations
. Despite it seemingly being a good step in the right direction, is the initiative
actually useful? This paragraph will discuss the advantages and disadvantages
of the development
and aims
to provide
information of
it.To start, in my opinion, it is
an amazing
development
that would help provide
knowledge for those in need of it. It would
greatly
provide
support and include the minority of the
population
that may not have had access to proper
education
whereas before this
development
, they would have
to miss
out on proper
education
and lead them to have a worse and missed career opportunity.
Additionally, not only is it beneficial to the receiver, the average literacy rate of the state
would also
greatly
increase
provided
that the development
were to be started. With all that said, this development
would be greatly
beneficial to the state
and receivend
end.However, some
disadvantages
of this development
should also
be taken
account and not overlooked. Firstly, despite the initiative
aiming
to reach most populations
and trying to include everyone, it would be a pipedream
to even manage taking
account of every population
. Not only is it way
too much
population
to handle, the resources needed would also
be way
less than enough to cover that many needs, leading to some minority being left out of the development
. Secondly, the initiative
would require way
more funds and workload than available. Unless the initative
figure
out an intuitive way to be able to cut corners and find willing workforces, the development
would not be able to be carried out as planned.Despite the
disadvantages
this initiative
brings, I believe that the advantages greatly
outweighs
it. Provided
that the initiative
figure
out how to run the development
properly, this development
will take
our state
to a better, and brighter future.