IELTS Writing Task 2 Sample Band 5.5
IELTS Essay Sample Band 5.5
5.5
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The essay addresses the task but has several grammatical errors and lacks coherence. Vocabulary is adequate but could be more varied, and the ideas need better development and logical flow.
| Overall score | 5.5 | |
| Grammatical range and accuracy | 5.0 | |
| Lexical resource | 5.0 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 5.0 | |
| Task response | 6.0 |
| Total Errors | 33 | |
| Grammatical range and accuracy | 16 | |
| Lexical resource | 9 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 4 | |
| Task response | 4 |
Question
In many democratic societies, criminal trials are open to the public as a means to ensure transparency and fairness in the judicial process.
Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of allowing public access to criminal trials.
#Criminal Justice
#Advantage / Disadvantage
Submitted Answer
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Thesis Statement
trialing
a criminal suspect. The presence of audience
in the courtroom can bring advantages to the suspects as well as disadvantages to them. I will examine both view in below
paragraph.Broadcasting the trial to
public
can bring some advantages. First, transparency.
because
the process
is guided by the public, all applicant's and defendent
's plea and evidences
will be witnessed by many. With that in mind, it can prevent any abuse of power by the public servant. For example, a criminal case enthusiast likes to analyse the case process
including judge and prosecutor's appeal, and conclude whether the verdict is arbitrary or not . Next, it can ensure the law enforcement are doing prudent
job. Since the hearing will be heard by people, any wrongdoing can be noted and reported later.However, there are also some dark
side
on
this methode
. Publishing the case to the public may promote criminality and even foster same
modus operandi
. Criminals may steal the idea and apply it somewhere else. For example, many serial killers have an inspirational figures
. If we let that happen then
it will be hard
to brake
the cycle. Furthermore, open judicial process
may as well expose the victims. The exposure can create more trauma even
to their family and relatives. The feeling of embarassement
can frustrate them that can lead to negative result.In conclusion, open judicial
process
is a sign of democratic era, where transparency and fairness are paramount. However, it also has some drawbacks
such as promoting criminality and expossing
the victims.