IELTS Writing Task 2 Sample Band 6
IELTS Essay Sample Band 6
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The essay addresses the question well, discussing both the consequences of deforestation and strategies to prevent it. However, there are several grammatical errors and awkward phrasings that affect readability and coherence. Vocabulary usage is adequate but could be more varied and precise.
| Overall score | 6.0 | |
| Grammatical range and accuracy | 5.0 | |
| Lexical resource | 6.0 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 6.0 | |
| Task response | 6.0 |
| Total Errors | 29 | |
| Grammatical range and accuracy | 11 | |
| Lexical resource | 10 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 4 | |
| Task response | 4 |
Question
Deforestation has significant impacts on biodiversity and climate, leading to global calls for effective prevention strategies.
What are the consequences of deforestation, and what strategies can be used to prevent it?
#Environment
#Direct Question
Submitted Answer
English:
Words:312
Paragraphs:6
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Thesis Statement
a significant harm
to the biodiversity and climate, creating dangerous consequences to
the society. Lately, numerous strategies have been implemented to reduce the damage to the ecosystem. This discussion will delve into both the repercussions and mitigation ways to minimize deforestation.One of the most pressing issues, that affects
biodiversity
is land
erosion. The flora plays a very crucial role in protecting the land
, so if there is increased elimination of trees and plants
it could lead to land
degradation. Resulting, in poor soil and water minerals. Due to that rivers, plants
and animals that survive on land
and water may fall short of the necessary nutrients for them to survive. This can create problems like hunger, drought or dieseases
. Additionally, if the flora is threatened or reduced it can impose life threatening
issues to human beings, for example
there will be less oxgyen
produced for human consumption and more carbon dioxide realised. This can create an inbalance
between the respiratory system of people and plants
.Moreover, forest depletion causes climate
change
, this can have a huge influence on sudden temperature, humidity and precipitation changes
. The sudden change
on
weather can impact the growth of seasonal plants
that might not favour the changes
.Furthermore, increased rainfall can cause floods, which can affect the
countries
economy, with relocating people, new housing and rebulding
infrastructures.To mitigate these issues, the government can raise awareness by enforcing policies to the public like National Tree Planting days, to increase
forest
population. In addition, promoting sustainable practices that avoids
excess damage to the environment
like advanced agricultural methods or better mining practices. Local authorities can assist by monitoring and address illegal mining.In conclusion, it is essential for the community to be aware of the consequences that
comes
with deforestation and ways to ellimanate
it.