IELTS Essay Checker - Sample Band 6
IELTS Writing Task 2 Sample Band 6 | IELTS Essay Sample Band 6
6.0
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The essay addresses the question but has several grammatical errors and lacks coherence in some parts. Vocabulary usage is adequate but could be more varied, and the ideas need more development and logical flow.
| Overall score | 6.0 | |
| Grammatical range and accuracy | 6.0 | |
| Lexical resource | 6.0 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 6.0 | |
| Task response | 6.0 |
| Total Errors | 18 | |
| Grammatical range and accuracy | 2 | |
| Lexical resource | 8 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 4 | |
| Task response | 4 |
Question
Deforestation has significant impacts on biodiversity and climate, leading to global calls for effective prevention strategies.
What are the consequences of deforestation, and what strategies can be used to prevent it?
#Environment
#Direct Question
Submitted Answer
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Words:312
Paragraphs:6
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Thesis Statement
One of the most pressing issues, that affects biodiversity is
land
erosion. The flora plays a very crucial role in protecting the land
, so if there is increased elimination of trees and plants
it could lead to land
degradation. Resulting, in poor soil and water minerals. Due to that rivers, plants
and animals that survive on land
and water may fall short of the necessary nutrients for them to survive. This can create problems like hunger, drought or dieseases
. Additionally, if the flora is threatened or reduced it can impose life-threatening issues to human beings, for example, there will be less oxygen produced for human consumption and more carbon dioxide realised. This can create an imbalance between the respiratory system of people and plants
.Moreover, forest depletion causes climate
change
, this can have a huge influence on sudden temperature, humidity and precipitation changes
. The sudden change
in weather can impact the growth of seasonal plants
that might not favour the changes
.Furthermore, increased rainfall can cause floods, which can affect the
countrie
's economy, with relocating people, new housing and rebulding
infrastructures.To mitigate these issues, the government can raise awareness by enforcing policies to the public like National Tree Planting days, to increase forest population. In addition, promoting sustainable practices that avoid excess damage to the environment like advanced agricultural methods or better mining practices. Local authorities can assist by monitoring and address illegal mining.
In conclusion, it is essential for the community to be aware of the consequences that
comes
with deforestation and ways to ellimanate
it.