IELTS Essay Checker - Sample Band 5

IELTS Writing Task 2 Sample Band 5 | IELTS Essay Sample Band 5

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The essay presents a clear opinion but lacks coherence and cohesion, with abrupt transitions and incomplete ideas. Grammar and vocabulary usage need improvement, with several errors and limited range affecting clarity.
Overall score5.0
Grammatical range and accuracy4.0
Lexical resource5.0
Coherence & cohesion5.0
Task response5.0
Total Errors22
Grammatical range and accuracy2
Lexical resource8
Coherence & cohesion7
Task response5

Writing Task

#Family
#Agree / Disagree
There is a debate on whether traditional or modern family structures provide a better environment for raising children.
To what extent do you agree or disagree that traditional family structures are more effective for child upbringing than modern family structures?

Submitted Answer

Words168|Paragraphs3
English:UK English
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Thesis Statement
Debates concerning society have become increasingly pressing. There is a belief that traditional
family
structures
offer a better education for
children
's development than
mordern
. In my perspective, I disagree with this opinion and I deem that modern
family
structures
children
's development.
The primary reason is that modern
families
would offer
children
with gender-neutral insights.
This is because mothers and fathers in this
structure
tend to take balanced responsibilities on their commitments on the
child
's upbringing, household and earning income, which supports
children
to understand gender equality more profoundly, encouraging them to equip with
open-mindeness
when pursuing career and educational pathways.
Acoording
to a survey conducted by Harvard University, 70%
children
who raising from parents who
deviding
household.
Furthermore, modern
family
structure
can provide stable financial environments for
children
, hence allowing
children
to receive high-quality education and obtain nutritious meals, which could fundamentally enhance
children
's physical strengths and support their spiritual wellbeing.
By contrast.
For example, a report published by China
Daily

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