IELTS Writing Task 2 Sample Band 6
IELTS Essay Sample Band 6
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Question
Promoting cycling and walking as complements to public transport can enhance public health and reduce urban congestion. However, it requires infrastructure investment and may not be feasible everywhere.
Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of promoting cycling and walking alongside public transport.
#Public Transport
#Advantage / Disadvantage
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Thesis Statement
Cycling
and public transports
are two different ball games. Where cycling
promotes physical activity and better health and physique, public transport is useful for areas facing lack
of well established infrastructure.Cycling
and walking has
adequate benefits on
human health and the general environment. It is vital to realise the importance of physical activity in today's world
where diets are of low-quality and the environment is disrupted due to
the depletion of the ozone layer. When
cycling
will be
promoted, it would encourage the society as a whole to spend a portion of their day in
actvities
that apparently
make
their bodies move and
help
burn calories, and when
people
will cycle together, it will create a sense of livelihood in the society.
Also, cycling or avoiding the use of public/private
transports
will help reduce the uses of beneficial resources like petroleum or gasoline
. Adding to that, with lesser cars/bikes, lesser space will be required for parking your vehicles around the street and will reduce the need to build skyscrapers as parking lots, thus ensuring lesser illegal buildings in the city and more space for adding greenery in the surroundings.
On the flip side,
cycling
does have certain disadvantages. For example, the lack of economy due to
which infrastructure suitable for cycling
/walking can't
be developed. For
cycling
/walking to continually take place, proper
cycling
tracks/zebra crossing and traffic management is required so that cyclists can enjoy their ride and not feel like a burden
due to
the low speed of cycles
infront
of cars or trains/buses.
Also, in today's world where
people
value their time
over money, and hardly find time
for themselves, its
hard for them to put time
into cycling
. Henceforth, very few
people
would be able to invest time
in it and would have to suffer with means of safety and time
conservation.Cycling
has its fair share of benefits and drawbacks, depending on the person's perspective and how they value their health. However, people
cant
totally be blamed for their choices since government
and the economy also plays
its role and has to be held equally accountable.