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The essay addresses the question but lacks depth in analysis and examples. Grammar and vocabulary are adequate but contain errors and lack variety, while coherence and cohesion need improvement for better readability.
| Overall score | 6.0 | |
| Grammatical range and accuracy | 6.0 | |
| Lexical resource | 6.0 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 6.0 | |
| Task response | 6.0 |
| Total Errors | 17 | |
| Grammatical range and accuracy | 4 | |
| Lexical resource | 6 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 3 | |
| Task response | 4 |
Question
Crime is a persistent concern in many societies, impacting the sense of safety and community life.
What are the principal reasons for high crime rates in some communities, and how can these rates be reduced?
#Society
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Thesis Statement
cases
cause trouble for the population and raises
concerns about security. There are several driving forces behind cases
of breaking the law.Different factors force people to commit treason, but not all crimes are intentional and some are a result of lack of information. Firstly,
in many
cases
the biggest motivator behind unlawful actions is money. For example, different circumstances, harsh living conditions or even greed can be a cause of people going to extreme measures in order to satisfy their needs. Secondly, the nature of human beings is very mysterious. It is not rare for many convicts to be unable to express their reasons for their wrongdoings. Finally, not abiding by the law may be a result of ignorance. This is often the case
with accidents on roads, which are filled with uneducated drivers.The government and the community must implement various solutions towards the improvement of the safety of the public. To begin with, schools
plays
a vital role in the forming of a future citizen. In other words, there must be adjustments made to the education system, which must provide a sustainable and a successful future for the younger generation. With that in mind, there should be a considerable amount of money allocated towards the safety of the population. For instance, the police must be better equipped and there should be survaillance
cameras placed in all streets and building
.In conclusion, the
indcidents
of unlawful acts are unavoidable in society and there will always be motives behind them. People's evironment
or simply their nature can be an excuse. However, the government must pay more attention to the raising of the future generation and provide resources required.