IELTS Writing Task 2 Sample Band 5
IELTS Essay Sample Band 5
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The essay addresses the task but lacks depth and clarity in its arguments. Grammar and vocabulary usage are basic, with several errors affecting readability and coherence.
| Overall score | 5.0 | |
| Grammatical range and accuracy | 5.0 | |
| Lexical resource | 5.0 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 5.0 | |
| Task response | 5.0 |
| Total Errors | 26 | |
| Grammatical range and accuracy | 10 | |
| Lexical resource | 9 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 3 | |
| Task response | 4 |
Question
Youth crime has been a persistent issue affecting societies worldwide, with young individuals increasingly involved in criminal activities. This not only disrupts social order but also affects the future of the young individuals involved.
Discuss why youth crime is a significant issue and suggest some solutions to reduce it.
#Youth Crime
#Problem / Solution
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has
been impacted by this alot
as a result
the new generation is being a part of criminal activities which is not only impacting the social order and disrupting the future of young people. Upcoming writing would be having a discussion about reasons
and solutions to this problem.To start with the root cause of this increased crime by
youth
it can be clearly said that the major influence behind this is
social media platform. Where they are seeing some activities those are not appropriate but no one is there to guide them to the right path. Moreover, parents to
these youngsters are not aware where there kids are involved as they are feeling stress free
because of the smart phones
they are not in need to entertain their children and their jobs can be done effortlessly. Whereas, these offences are effecting the societies worldwide due to lack of security and peace of mind because peoplen
are not feeling safe.If the solutions to
this
unethical actions are taken into consideration
then a big role can be played by the parents and the elder people of every family. Youths should spend more time in their families to learn more ethical values and abide themselves with the knowledgeable leranings
even from the social media as well as from their relatives. Schools can also be the role models for these inviduals
to teach them the right and wrong during their lectures.To conclude this essay, I can say that every problem comes with a resolution but the most crucial thing is how to use that solution. For
instance
technology is best
friend to whom those are using it wisely and can be an enemy to those who are using it oppositely.