IELTS Writing Task 2 Sample Band 5
IELTS Essay Sample Band 5
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The essay addresses the question but lacks depth in discussing both advantages and disadvantages. Grammar and vocabulary need improvement, and the essay should be more cohesive and coherent. The thesis statement is present but not clear enough.
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| Grammatical range and accuracy | 5.0 | |
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| Coherence & cohesion | 5.0 | |
| Task response | 5.0 |
| Total Errors | 27 | |
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| Coherence & cohesion | 6 | |
| Task response | 4 |
Question
Some cities have imposed curfews for young people as a measure to reduce youth crime, restricting their movement during late evening and night hours.
Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of imposing curfews on youths to reduce crime rates.
#Youth Crime
#Advantage / Disadvantage
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amoung
youths and adults nowadays. Some states have introduced a curfew for teenagers in order to reduce the crime rate and restrict their movement during late evenings and night hours. This essay will examine both the benefits and the drawbacks.To begin
with
the advantages of imposing a curfew for minors firstly, parents who often deal with trust issues about their children's safety are no longer worried since their kids are already infront
of them. Another thing is preventing youths from getting involved in inappropriate stuff and having bad company as well. For instance, a 16 years
old boy going out at night by himself can be dangerous for various reasons
and the main one being drugs. Having children accompanied with
an adult is the only solution that needs to be considered.Although adjusting specific hours for adolescent can be beneficial most of the time, it also
come
with certain drawbacks, one clear example is that young people often tend to hang out with their friends at during evening times, with this restriction
they're
vulnerable for losing their friendships.
Another negative thing
In conclusion, imposing a curfew is considered to be a good thing for both the parents and
children
prevent
them from getting involved in bad stuff. In my opinion,
i
believe that
stricting
certain hours for teenagers is very helpful
snd
this law can be removed in one case and that is having an elderly encountered with minors,
i
think a regulation like this could be extremely effective in terms of preventing any trouble that teens might get involved in.