IELTS Writing Task 2 Sample Band 5

IELTS Essay Sample Band 5

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Corruption within the law enforcement agencies undermines the criminal justice system and erodes public trust.
What problems does corruption within law enforcement cause and what solutions can be proposed to combat this issue?
#Criminal Justice
#Problem / Solution
Submitted Answer
English:UK English
Words:291
Paragraphs:17
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Thesis Statement
Corruption
is one of the major
obstacle
on
the
development
of a county.
Corruption
within the law encourages the crime and
doesn't
fulfills
one's right properly. Here,
I am about to discuss
the cause and solution of the
corruption
prevailing in a country.
Corruption
and its consequences hamper every aspect of the
development
of the country. Especially in developing countries like Nepal,
corruption
and its control become the main problem. Different political movements, as well as socio-economic transitions,
corruption
also contribute to the extension of
corruption
. For combating
corruption
, many strategies have been launched but no significant result is obtained.
Thus
this study will address the following statement of problems
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1How does political instability or movements enhance
corruption
?
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2 How does
corruption
affect the form of socio-economic
developments
?
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3 e- Government/Governance is the best strategy for anti-
corruption
or not?
Corruption
is now recognized as a global phenomenon, which has to be
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addressed coherently and consistently.
The need for concerted action in Nepal is
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evident.
Nepal has to become more integrated into the global economy and attract
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greater levels of foreign and domestic investment if it is to achieve the growth rate
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necessary to reduce poverty and improve the well-being of its population.
Corruption
can be highlighted as the conscious attempt or deliberate diversion
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of resources from the satisfaction of the general interest to that of personal interest.
The
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disdain for
corruption
is felt mainly on the ground of morality. There is no doubt that it
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inflicts some sort of adverse effects on any society where it exists and persists until
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such a society is purged of its immorality (Lawal, n.d.).
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Corruption
is a considerable obstacle to economic and social
development
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around the world.