IELTS Writing Task 2 Sample Band 5.5
IELTS Essay Sample Band 5.5
5.5
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The essay addresses the question but lacks coherence and has numerous grammatical errors. The ideas are somewhat developed but need better organization and more precise language use.
| Overall score | 5.5 | |
| Grammatical range and accuracy | 5.0 | |
| Lexical resource | 5.0 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 5.0 | |
| Task response | 6.0 |
| Total Errors | 45 | |
| Grammatical range and accuracy | 10 | |
| Lexical resource | 23 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 8 | |
| Task response | 4 |
Question
As the climate crisis continues to evolve, there is ongoing debate about the effectiveness of current policies and whether new strategies are needed.
Discuss whether the current policies for combating climate change are effective and if there is a need for new strategies.
#Climate Change
#Discussion
Submitted Answer
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Words:327
Paragraphs:3
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Thesis Statement
Climate change is something that has been bothering our race for the past few decades, it came as the result of what we call the industrialization era in which people used natural resources of our planet to generate fortunes without caring for the
environemnt
which
caused global warming, and global warming caused climate change.
Many
policies
by the world and countries have been implemented
to combat against this axe hanging upon our heads, yet the effects are minimal. One could argue that the reason for this lies in the governments of each country not taking the problrm
seriously
as they are more focused on corruption than on the environment.Currently
many
policies
have been made
yet when it comes to implementing
them, the rich and governements
don't
bat an eye. Many
factories pollute the rivers of the world alongside
emmiting
dangerous
greenshouse
gases
responsible for the damage
on
ozone
layeralongside
making
a layer of carbon in the
atmospehere
increasing
the planet's
temprature
.Cars and other motor vehicles do not have
bulit
in exhaust which
make
sure that the
gas
emitted is not dangerous, factories release sulphur and phosphorous alongside nitrogen, carbon and
many
other dangerous
gases
just because it will cost a bit more to use an air filtration.
I
beleive
a
policy
should be
made
which bans cars and motor vehicles which do not release
properly
converted
gasses
, furthermore usage of paper should be
banned
especially paper straws which are being used instead of plastic, the countries should not cut down the lifeline of our planet just to
make
straws.
Plastic should be
properly
disposed
,
there should be a limit to trees
cutdown
which is to be
properly
implemented
, the companies which
cutdown
trees for
fruniture
or paper should be
made
to plant at least 5% more trees than they cut down.
Also
I beleive
the current policies
regarding climate change should be properly
implemented
disregarding the status and wealth of the one accused.