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IELTS Writing Task 2 Sample Band 5.5 | IELTS Essay Sample Band 5.5

5.5
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The essay provides a clear opinion and attempts to support it, but contains several grammatical errors and lacks examples. Coherence is maintained, but cohesion could be improved with better linking of ideas and more varied vocabulary.
Overall score5.5
Grammatical range and accuracy5.0
Lexical resource5.0
Coherence & cohesion6.0
Task response6.0
Total Errors32
Grammatical range and accuracy11
Lexical resource12
Coherence & cohesion4
Task response5
Question
Children are generally more successful in foreign language studies than adults. Thus, it is better to learn languages in childhood.
Do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
#Education
#Agree / Disagree
Submitted Answer
English:UK English
Words:350
Paragraphs:3
Paragraph Count Requirement
Example Required
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Ideas Development
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Thesis Statement
Children
are generally more successful in studying a foreign
language
than
adults
do. Therefore, some say it is better to
learn
languages
during childhood. I agree that
children
does pick up
languages
much
faster
than
adults
, and this has its reasons. Though, to limit oneself to
learn
languages
jsut
because one deemed that they
are
too late to do so, is something that I disagree on.
Children
picks
up
languages
faster
than
adults
do because their
brains
are still in the stage of development, where the
brain
tend
to absorb everything (including foreign
languages
)
fast
. Of course, this means that
learning
a new
language
in your childhood does give you some big advantages. You could
learn
faster
, and
usually
more holistically than
adults
do. This results in the new
language
to be
ingrained in the
brain
, and
gave
you natural control over the
language
. In contrast,
adults
usually
learn
languages
more methodically. They would deliberately study the
language
. This method of learning can result in the
language
not fully acquired. Lots of
language
learners I knew who
learn
this way
usually
translate each
sentences
in their
brain
from their mother tongue instead of producing
naturaly
. This made them think that
learning
a
language
is hard.
Though
learning
a
language
in adulthood may need more time and effort than in childhood, this, I
think
should not be something to deter your goal by. There are ways to acquire a
language
that will be most close to the way a
child
learn
. This method
usually
comprises of
two main things, namely input and output. Instead of going into
language
classes and
learn
by rote memorization, you could just focus on consuming comprehensible input from the
language
you are trying to
learn
. This method hopes to build natural feeling of the
language
by introducing the
language
pattern to the
brain
through
language
input. Then, you could practice to 'output' the
language
, by producing something in that
language
(speaking or writing).
In conclusion,
adults
could still
learn
a
language
as good as
children
do
given that they use the right strategies to do that.

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