IELTS Writing Task 2 Sample Band 5.5
IELTS Essay Sample Band 5.5
5.5
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The essay addresses the question but has several grammatical errors and lacks coherence. The ideas are somewhat developed but need better organization and clearer examples.
| Overall score | 5.5 | |
| Grammatical range and accuracy | 5.0 | |
| Lexical resource | 6.0 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 5.0 | |
| Task response | 6.0 |
| Total Errors | 49 | |
| Grammatical range and accuracy | 22 | |
| Lexical resource | 19 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 4 | |
| Task response | 4 |
Question
Differences between countries become less evident each year. Nowadays, all over the world people share the same fashions, advertising, brands, eating habits and TV channels.
Do the disadvantages of this trend outweigh the advantages?
#Culture
#Advantage / Disadvantage
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Paragraphs:4
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Thesis Statement
more
, have decreased. One can argue that this progress have
led humen
to be united, whilst others oppose this idea and claim that many cultural
features can be forgotten and replaced with the modern and foreign deisgns
. In this essey
, I will look over this debate in more
detail to see, if indeed the the
less and less difference between countries
is benificial
or not.Social media
have
cause
us to access across the globe's cultural
belifes
and habits. Correspondingly, in many cases
, people would favor
overseas features over their own, For instance, number
of Asian restaurants in london
is more
than pubs. Patterns such as these would subtly affect on young generation's awareness
over
their
country
's heritages, conventional conducts, knowledge
over
their local foods, etc. To set an example,
despite of
the fact that through history, Roman empire and Persian monarchy never delved within
eachother
, in recent decades , Iranian
architect
use Romanian building and architecture as their inspiration.
As it can be evaluated from this example, if this trend continues, Iran where once upon a time, was the country
of art and music, would be endanger
of loosing its architectural signature.on the other hand, nowadays outcome in social pattern is undoubtedly due the evolution
and
it is not necessarily unfavourable. Todays
society is an indication of that people of diverse background can live
peacefully together and diveresness
in a community can be substantially valuable, not only for now but also in future
. For example
through
many european
countries
and North america, numerous people with varied cultural
origin
are found living
in tranquility
. young
generation
therefore, would learn more
from their peers of different originality of the world they live
in and hence improve
their knowledge in general.To conclude,
advantages
of merged cultural
conducts is
more considerable than its disadvantages due to the fact that young
generation learn to live
in serenity with ones of different originality.