IELTS Essay Checker - Sample Band 6

IELTS Writing Task 2 Sample Band 6 | IELTS Essay Sample Band 6

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The essay addresses the task by discussing both benefits and drawbacks, but lacks depth in idea development and critical analysis. Grammar and vocabulary are adequate, though there are some errors and limited range, affecting coherence and cohesion.
Overall score6.0
Grammatical range and accuracy6.0
Lexical resource6.0
Coherence & cohesion6.0
Task response6.0
Total Errors19
Grammatical range and accuracy5
Lexical resource6
Coherence & cohesion3
Task response5

Writing Task

#Sport
#Discussion
Hosting international sports events, such as the Olympic Games or the FIFA World Cup, often involves significant national investment and has a broad set of impacts on the host country.
Discuss the benefits and drawbacks of a country hosting international sports events.

Submitted Answer

Words256|Paragraphs4
English:UK English
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Thesis Statement
Being the host
country
for a significant sports
event
such as the Olympics or the FIFA World Cup can have many
effects
on the
country
, these
effects
may be both positive and negative.
This essay will discuss
the advantages and disadvantages of
hosting
such
events
.
On one hand, the nation's economy will be significantly boosted, this will be through the revenue of the
great
number of tourists that visit the
country
for the
event
. Moreover, it allows light to be shed on the
country
and this will in turn increase the number of tourists in the future. An example of this was the 2022 FIFA World Cup that was
hosted
by Qatar, the
country
saw a
great
jump in their tourism the following years while it was previously not a tourist attraction.
On the other hand, a
great
deal of money is invested in bettering the infrastructure and building stadiums and hotels. This
change
while perceived as positive, has devastating
effects
on the
country
's economic stability. This was seen in
Brazil
which
hosted
the World Cup, but was drowned in debt for 20 years following the
event
. Furthermore, it can also threaten the
country
's security as thousands or even millions of people are brought together in one place, this can eventually lead to terrorist attacks.
To conclude,
hosting
a major sports
event
is a
great
matter that can have
significant
effect
on a
country
's tourism, economy and security and so it is best to carefully consider all aspects before making a decision.

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