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Question
In many countries, governments spend significant resources on promoting national culture through festivals, museums, and public television programs.
What are the advantages and disadvantages of governments promoting national culture?
#Culture
#Advantage / Disadvantage
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Thesis Statement
countries
are
known to advertise national cultural sites via television shows, festivals, and museums, spending a lot of money
. Although spent finances could be more
concentrated on solving problems and meeting citizens' needs, this focus on promotion can acquire people more
about diverse cultures and develop tourism
.Budget
money
is considered to be used for creating new solutions. Instead of waiting for global \ hardles
to emerge, government can pan and make decisions to cope with a certain issue step-by-step. This might prevent a future crisis and even lead to thriving spheres. For example, if enough amount of money
has
been granted on virusology
, Kazakhstan would not face a deficiency of virusologists
now. Furthermore, modern advancements could be made by now, responding to the people's needs. These decisions would be more
rational in comparison with spending resources on advertisement.Nevertheless, it is known that recognisability is crucial for
countries
' tourism
and culture. By promoting the mother land
, people from all over the world are encouraged to visit a specific national destination. This attraction of sightseers improves the tourism
sector, following by a higher income and cultural knowledge. For instance, 5th
"Nomad Games" festival, which had been organized this autumn in Astana, has increased the number of visitors in Kazakhstan. This global event made country
more
known on international arena and brought hundred thousand dollars in tourism
.In conclusion, governments are promoting national features by spending an enormous amount of
money
on television programs, local events and cultural sites. While it might be considered as irrational due to possibility
to find solutions and respond on
citizens' demands, it is also essential for the development of the tourism
and recognition of countries
on international level.