IELTS Writing Task 2 Sample Band 5
IELTS Essay Sample Band 5
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The essay addresses the question but lacks clear structure and coherence. Grammar and vocabulary usage are basic with several errors, and the essay lacks specific examples to support the arguments. Improvement in logical flow and idea development is needed.
| Overall score | 5.0 | |
| Grammatical range and accuracy | 4.0 | |
| Lexical resource | 5.0 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 5.0 | |
| Task response | 5.0 |
| Total Errors | 36 | |
| Grammatical range and accuracy | 10 | |
| Lexical resource | 14 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 6 | |
| Task response | 6 |
Question
A lot of people who wanted to become professional athletes gave up this idea because of the fear of failure and parents' pressure.
Do you think that parents should support their children who want to do a career in sports? Support your point of view with relevant examples from your knowledge or experience.
#Sport
#Direct Question
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Words:219
Paragraphs:4
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Thesis Statement
Athletes
are professional
players that play sports .A lot of teenagers these days
wants
to become a
professional
athletes
, but they are scared of failing and need
some people to support them
like their family and friends . Most of the parents
think
that sport is not a future but its
totally the opposite, Alot of people made
it professional
.Most of the
parents
think
that sport is not a future but
its
totally the opposite, Alot of people
made
it
professional
.Therefore, the
parents
play a big role in the
athlete
mentality , they can
make
them improve and help them to reach the top and always give them hope.
Parents
need
to motivate their children because sport has a big future.in the other way, athletics suffer mentally more than physically
, because
everytime
they
do
a mistake they
think
they will fail
and
they are bad.Moreover,athletics
need
to have a good mentality to fight for their dreams and being
professional
one
day
.
In my opinion, the families
need
to support their athletes
children and give them a high hope to make
it professional
one day
. Moreover, athletes
need
to motivate themselves and always think
that they will make
it one day
and they dont
need
to wait for others to suuport
them they
need
to support themselves.