IELTS Writing Task 2 Sample Band 5.5

IELTS Essay Sample Band 5.5

5.5
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The essay addresses the task but lacks depth and specific examples. Grammar and vocabulary need improvement, and the essay's coherence and cohesion could be enhanced with better structure and transitions.

Overall score5.5
Grammatical range and accuracy5.0
Lexical resource5.0
Coherence & cohesion5.0
Task response6.0
Total Errors34
Grammatical range and accuracy12
Lexical resource13
Coherence & cohesion4
Task response5
Question
As digital marketing continues to evolve, traditional businesses often struggle to keep up, potentially losing market share to more digitally savvy competitors.
Discuss the challenges faced by traditional businesses due to digital marketing and suggest ways they can adapt to remain competitive.
#Business & Money
#Problem / Solution
Submitted Answer
English:UK English
Words:227
Paragraphs:2
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Thesis Statement
As the era of
digitalization
grows and getting bigger overtime,
businesses
should be run not only as usual but with a lot of innovation.
Digital
marketing
will be
an important things
to be done by all
businesses
today. People who run
traditional
busnesses
can not
sit idly and
complaining
about the growth of
digital
marketing
which might potentially decrease their market share. Instead,
traditional
businesses
should try to learn
digital
marketing
if they want their
businesses
grow or even
getting
bigger in capital. The challenges that can be faced by
traditional
businesses
mostly is the willing to move and transform the
businesess
. We, as the world changes, should adapt
with
the situation and the changes made by a lot of
digitalization
. As industrialization has
change
the world in the 19th century, people
needs
to adapt to the
digitalization
if
they do not want to struggle
.
Innovation and the willingness to learn new things will be the key of success for
traditional
businesses
to compete in the
digital
era. Learning and doing
digital
marketing
is a must and
can not
be avoided by any
business
who
want
to compete in this era of
digitalization
. As
digitlization
also
offer
a lot of easy way to learn new things through
Youtube
or even another
digital
platform, one should not just
complaining
about condition but try to adapt and grow stronger.