IELTS Writing Task 2 Sample Band 6
IELTS Essay Sample Band 6
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The essay provides a clear opinion and some valid points, but it lacks detailed examples and has some grammatical errors. Improved coherence and more varied vocabulary would enhance the overall quality.
| Overall score | 6.0 | |
| Grammatical range and accuracy | 6.0 | |
| Lexical resource | 6.0 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 6.0 | |
| Task response | 6.0 |
| Total Errors | 18 | |
| Grammatical range and accuracy | 2 | |
| Lexical resource | 7 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 4 | |
| Task response | 5 |
Question
As societies modernize, there is often a tension between the desire to advance technologically and economically, and the need to preserve cultural heritage and traditions.
Do you agree or disagree that preserving cultural heritage should be prioritized over modernization?
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#Agree / Disagree
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Words:178
Paragraphs:2
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Thesis Statement
I'm
concerned, preserving cultural
heritage
should be prioritized as our commitment to keep our region
's identity
. The region
's identity
has its history and has transformed into many kinds of cultural
heritage
and traditions. The government, history community, and common people should encourage preserving cultural
heritage
to increase the attention to existing history heritage
. Unity in their role is necessary
in collaboration form, to increase our awareness of what culture has given to us about the region
's identity
.Additionally, advanced technology, as a form of technological advancement, must be one of the best ways to preserve our
cultural
heritage
and traditions. This type of technology must be utilized as a media platform to promote the matters of cultural
heritage
and traditions of region
. With the variety of strategies that should be formed, promoting the richness of our identity
should be an important agenda in a region
's society. So, this gives great potential to the economic development of the region
, one of which is thanks to the opening of the tourism sector.