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Genetic engineering holds the promise of curing genetic diseases and improving human health, but ethical and safety concerns persist.
Evaluate the advantages and disadvantages of genetic engineering in medicine.
#Health
#Advantage / Disadvantage
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Thesis Statement
genetic
modifications
holds
the potentail
to overcome the inherited illnesses and enhance people's wellness, the lowful
and security issues are still remaining. When considering the healthcare sector there
are both benefits and drawbacks.Genetic
engeneering
, also known as genetic
modification
or genetic
manipulation. Which is the process of altering an organism's DNA makeup using laboratory-based technologies. This process can take part in changing single base pairs, deleting a reagion
of DNA , adding a new segment of DNA or adding a gene from one species to an organism from a different species. Also,this method is used in many areas such as
food products like genetically modified plants. brewing
yeasts etc.
When considering the medical sector, this method is mainly used for finding
treatments
or curing inherited deseases
such as
cancers, diebitics
or syndroms
. The treatment
can be either a vaccination or a theropy
. Moreover, genetically altered medicines can help to cure, illnesses like cancers, very fast than
going through long term painful procedures.Further, genetically altered
high quality
treatments
can reduce the risk of syndroms
such as
downsyndrom
, ADHD. Wich
has high probability of passing to our furture
generations.As an example, a recent report released by
world health organization
, indicates that 60% of the 4th stage cancer patient's lives can be saved with 3 course vaccination.However, these alterations have a negative side also, which
athorities
should forcus
on. Some of the modifications
has been done to match generally for everyone, but there can be few that these modifications
are not supporting with their bodies. Which can cause for a deth
or serious illness, like paralizing
.Some of the medicines that they have found may be given to the
pregnent
mothers to reduce the risk of syndroms
and deseases
of the new born
.But that can bad affect
for the chiled
laterally. Same these treatments
can help to cure the sickness but can directly affecting
for the kidnes
. Apart from the health sector, geneticall
alterd
food can introduce new deseases
.To conclude, the benefits from
genetic
engineering outwhigh
the drowback
by accelarating
the human health.