IELTS Essay Checker - Sample Band 6
IELTS Writing Task 2 Sample Band 6 | IELTS Essay Sample Band 6
6.0
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11 Nov 24, 21:44
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The essay addresses the causes and solutions for air pollution but lacks depth in idea development and coherence. Grammatical errors and limited vocabulary range affect clarity and precision, while the essay's structure could be more logically organized.
| Overall score | 6.0 | |
| Grammatical range and accuracy | 5.0 | |
| Lexical resource | 6.0 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 6.0 | |
| Task response | 6.0 |
| Total Errors | 23 | |
| Grammatical range and accuracy | 6 | |
| Lexical resource | 9 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 4 | |
| Task response | 4 |
Question
Air pollution is a major environmental risk to health and contributes to several diseases including respiratory infections and heart disease.
What causes air pollution in major cities, and what measures can be implemented to reduce it?
#Environment
#Problem / Solution
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Paragraphs:4
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palmonary
infections and heart disease. The fuels
we burn to generate our electricity and drive our vehicles are the main perpetrators of Air pollution in bigger cities. The usage of green energy and substituting wood, coal and other fuels
seems to be the likeliest counter to this massive problemThe modern cities heavily rely on their vehicles to get going.
Altough
, these vehicles safely and fastly
carries
us to our destinations, the fuels
we burn in order to run these powerhouses are not environment-friendly. The prefferred
source of energy generation are reliant on coal, natural gas and such resources. The smoke that is produced has a terrible effect on the air quality in the surrounding areas. Moreover, Power plants do not capture the smoke from the air, Likely to the fact that such technology is not yet real. For example
in third world
countries, there are limited regulations on factories and power plants, Taking the pollution to greater heights. These two are the major contributors to air pollution in these otherwise bustling cities.Air pollution is increasingly posing a substantial threat
towards
the future of humankind. Researchers have linked air pollution to several diseases that occur in our body. Due to the rising concern, The need to reduce air pollution is now greater than ever. We have to urgently find
other sources of fuel
that are not harmful towards our environment. The governments need to place regulations on power plants to switch to greener alternatives. Once we stop causing more pollution, We have to find ways to capture the carbon from the atmosphere. Some countries such as Norway are already embracing these changes for the sake of our environment.In conclusion, Air pollution is something
that's
bad news for everyone. The more we let it linger, the more problems it will be causing for us. Although air pollution is still on the rise due to the usage of fuels
that pollute the air, There are ways to battle this Issue if we all
as a species, co-operate and help each other.