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IELTS Writing Task 2 Sample Band 6 | IELTS Essay Sample Band 6
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The essay addresses the task but lacks a clear thesis statement and has several grammatical errors. Coherence and cohesion are maintained, but the logical flow could be improved. Vocabulary is adequate but not varied, and the essay could benefit from more precise language.
| Overall score | 6.0 | |
| Grammatical range and accuracy | 5.0 | |
| Lexical resource | 6.0 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 6.0 | |
| Task response | 6.0 |
| Total Errors | 37 | |
| Grammatical range and accuracy | 9 | |
| Lexical resource | 19 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 5 | |
| Task response | 4 |
Question
Recent research has shown that business meetings and training are increasingly taking place online.
What are the advantages and disadvantages of this?
#Business & Money
#Advantage / Disadvantage
Submitted Answer
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Thesis Statement
enterprises
to take
business meetings
and trainings
online. Although many companies can benefit from virtuality
many managers have a different point of view
about this new trend because of the lack of empathy and interpersonal relationship it may cause. On the other side, most employees
states
that this new approach could help people to improve productivity and focus on more important
work tasks
while others think interation
is crucial during meetings
.The more
important
reason that companies have to use virtuality is saving money. It is well known that office furniture as well as rents are very expensive
and rather necessary for the majority of businesses. After pandemic
, enterprises
have realized the big amount of money that can be save
, if the staff perform those duties, that do not requiere
presenciality
, from home. Nevertheless, managers do not quite agree with these perception
, as they argue the importance of interpersonal interaction during meetings
. Moreover, businessmen have even mentioned physical expresions
are very
important
for trasmiting
a message during a meeting
. For instance, a meeting
with clients would be better to be held face to face because in this way the seller can perform a better evaluation of the non-verbal expressions and take
advatages
on the selling process.Conversely,
employees
are more likely to prefer taking
meetings
and trainings
from home
considering this allows them to manage their time and be present at home for their children. However, during
meetings
some
employees
multitask and may
take
care of other work duties, this can lead to improving productivity
but
it can also lead to
meetings
being held with few people paying attention
an
trainings
were information can be missed.
In conclusion, there are many advantages and disadvantages for both
enterprises
and
employees
the most relevant advantages are the
enterprises
saving money and the
employees
managing their time whereas, when talking about disadvantages,
enterprises
may be losing
emphaty
and interpersonal relationships while
employees
would not pay attention to
meetings
and loss some
important
information from
trainings
.