IELTS Writing Task 2 Sample Band 5
IELTS Essay Sample Band 5
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The essay addresses the question but lacks clarity and coherence in some parts. Grammar and vocabulary need improvement, and the essay should be more structured to enhance readability and logical flow.
| Overall score | 5.0 | |
| Grammatical range and accuracy | 4.0 | |
| Lexical resource | 5.0 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 5.0 | |
| Task response | 5.0 |
| Total Errors | 49 | |
| Grammatical range and accuracy | 11 | |
| Lexical resource | 29 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 5 | |
| Task response | 4 |
Question
While technology drives economic growth and efficiency, it also contributes to widening the gap between the rich and the poor, as not everyone has equal access to technological resources.
Do you agree or disagree that the economic benefits of technology justify the increase in social inequality?
#Technology
#Agree / Disagree
Submitted Answer
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Thesis Statement
efficency
worldwide in various fields. However
some people
belives
that this trend has resulted in the gap between different economic class people
who can afford certain technolgies
and those who cannot. I believe that this has lead to increase in the gap between rich and poor people
due to
unasseciblity
of the tech resources
unavaliable
due to
financial
issues.To commence,
due to
the growth in the technological field, the financial
burdens have increased for the middle and lower class
people
as it is difficult for people
to access the resources
avaliable
in different departments. One of the main reason
behind unable to afford such resources
is due to
financial
crisis
people
are dealing with in their daily lives. Nowadays, it is even
difficult for people
to pay for their daily neccessities
. For instance, intrest
rates are queit
high globally and people
are stuggling
to even
buy a house in these
crisis
and
so they are opting for the rental prices.Furthermore, the
economical
growth and tecnological
resources
comes with heafty
price tags, which makes it unable for some people
to even
access those resources
. There are people
who cannot even
afford to pay for the medical treatements
which are avaliable
due to
advancement in the medical field. To
examplify
, this trend
have
led to increase the gap between
rich
and poor class as in
the the
financial
crisis
people
are struggling to
even
buy fresh food and on the other
hand
people
are spending thousands of the
dollors
on the luxuries items such as
hand bags
, shoes,
sunglassess
and technological devices like
iphone
,
macbook
and speakers.
To conclude, the
tecnology
has contributed to economic growth and efficiency. However on the hand this has led to social inequality due to
finical crisis
people
are facing in their daily lives.