IELTS Essay Checker - Sample Band 6.5
IELTS Writing Task 2 Sample Band 6.5 | IELTS Essay Sample Band 6.5
6.5
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04 Nov 24, 19:57
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The essay effectively discusses the challenges of maintaining work-life balance, but lacks specific solutions. Grammar and vocabulary are strong, though coherence could be improved with clearer transitions and a more structured argument.
| Overall score | 6.5 | |
| Grammatical range and accuracy | 8.0 | |
| Lexical resource | 6.0 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 6.0 | |
| Task response | 6.0 |
| Total Errors | 22 | |
| Grammatical range and accuracy | 2 | |
| Lexical resource | 11 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 5 | |
| Task response | 4 |
Question
Maintaining a healthy work-life balance is increasingly challenging in the modern work environment, leading to various personal and professional problems.
What are the main issues with maintaining a work-life balance, and what approaches can be taken to improve it?
#Work
#Problem / Solution
Submitted Answer
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Words:269
Paragraphs:4
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Thesis Statement
become
more
focused on work
-life
balance
than salary. Aviva says, “More workers said they were attracted to their current role for the work
-life
balance
(41%) than the salary (36%). This is a switch in rankings compared to 2019, before the pandemic.”Missing Linking Devices
Work
plays a significant part in all our lives
. Our earnings ensure that the lights stay on, there’s
food on the table and the rainy-day pot is full. With the looming cost of living crisis and energy bills playing on everyone’s minds, no one is underplaying the importance of earning enough to make a living... it just makes achieving work
-life
balance
that little bit harder!Missing Linking Devices
We’re
growing increasingly more
connected through technology and social media. For many, working from home has become
the new normal. It's
becoming
more
and more
difficult to separate work
from our personal lives
. It's
commonplace to check emails at all hours, take business calls at the dinner table
and work on our laptops on weekends. How has this become
acceptable?Employers expect more from their people, which leads to them feeling more pressure to achieve greater results. These pressures appear to have reached a breaking point, as people realise that they need to achieve better
balance
in their lives
. As a business leader, you have a responsibility to help all your team juggle the demands of their work
and personal lives
. Even your most engaged employees may still be struggling to find balance
.