IELTS Writing Task 2 Sample Band 5.5
IELTS Essay Sample Band 5.5
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The essay addresses the question but lacks clarity and coherence. Grammar and vocabulary usage need improvement, and the essay should be more structured with better logical flow and development of ideas.
| Overall score | 5.5 | |
| Grammatical range and accuracy | 5.0 | |
| Lexical resource | 5.0 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 5.0 | |
| Task response | 6.0 |
| Total Errors | 30 | |
| Grammatical range and accuracy | 3 | |
| Lexical resource | 16 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 7 | |
| Task response | 4 |
Question
Many countries rely heavily on imported food, which can be unsustainable and risky.
What factors contribute to a heavy reliance on imported food, and what can be done to encourage more local food production?
#Food
#Problem / Solution
Submitted Answer
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Paragraphs:4
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Thesis Statement
A number of
countries
depend largely on
food
being imported from different states ,and this can be unhealthy and may involve risk to some extent.Low
production
of
crops
in the
country
is one of the reasons to
food
import,but
farmers
should be encouraged to
grow
more
crops
,and the government should give them subsidies on different products used in the
production
of local
crops
.
A
country
has more needs than
it,s
production
.If a
country
does not
fulfill
it,s
food
requirements,it
mean
that less cereal,cash
crops
are
grown
in the
country
.Their can be several reasons for less cultivation of
crops
just like not giving good rates to the
farmers
.For example,
farmers
in a lot of states do not get good income from
growing
cash
crops
due to low rates.
People doing farming should be used by the leaders of state for
food
production
int
their own homeland.Citizens related with agricultural
production
should be given relaxation in prices of different products such as fertilizers,pesticides so that they can afford these things easily.If this initiative is taken,there will be a significant increase in
country
,s
own
food
production
.For instance,nations which are not able to meet their
food
requirements, often motivates farming individuals to produce
crops
extensively.
In conclusion,less
crop
production
results in
inability
of a
country
to
fulfill
it,s
needs and then importing
food
from other nations is the only choice left.
Countries
can overcome this problem by motivating their farming community to
grow
crops
extensively,however,this is only possible when
farmers
are
fascilitated
by their governments.