IELTS Essay Checker - Sample Band 7
IELTS Writing Task 2 Sample Band 7 | IELTS Essay Sample Band 7
7.0
Overall Score
18 Nov 24, 21:08
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Overall Feedback
The essay effectively addresses the task, discussing reasons for online socialization and its impacts, but could benefit from more detailed examples. The language is generally accurate with a good range of vocabulary, though some ideas could be more cohesively linked.
| Overall score | 7.0 | |
| Grammatical range and accuracy | 8.0 | |
| Lexical resource | 6.0 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 6.0 | |
| Task response | 7.0 |
| Total Errors | 29 | |
| Grammatical range and accuracy | 1 | |
| Lexical resource | 6 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 17 | |
| Task response | 5 |
Question
Nowadays, more people are choosing to socialise online rather than face to face.
Why might people want to do this? Is it a positive or negative development?
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Submitted Answer
English:
Words:232
Paragraphs:14
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Missing Linking Devices
Thesis Statement
Face
-to-Face
to Online SocializationToday, many
people
choose to socialize online instead of meeting in person
. This change is convenient but also creates challenges, especially for cultures like the Celts, which value community traditions.Missing Linking Devices
#### Why
People
Socialize Online
Technology makes it easy to stay in touch. Social media and video calls help
people
connect across long distances and fit interactions into busy lives. Online
spaces are also helpful for those uncomfortable in face
-to-face
situations.Missing Linking Devices
#### Benefits
Missing Linking Devices
Online
communication is flexible and easy. It helps people
keep relationships strong and meet others with shared interests, no matter
where they live.Missing Linking Devices
#### Problems
However,
online
interactions can feel less personal. They miss out on tone, body language, and facial expressions. Too much online
socializing can lead to loneliness, misunderstandings, and unrealistic comparisons on social media.Missing Linking Devices
#### Effects on Celtic Traditions
For the Celts, festivals and storytelling are best shared in
person
. While online
tools can teach others about Celtic culture, they cannot replace the personal connection of gathering together.Missing Linking Devices
#### Finding Balance
To balance both,
people
can use online
tools to plan in-person
events and stay connected while also making time for face
-to-face
interactions. This keeps traditions alive while using modern technology.Missing Linking Devices
#### Conclusion
Socializing online is convenient but cannot replace the depth of meeting in
person
. By using both wisely, people
can stay connected while preserving important traditions.