IELTS Letter Checker - Sample Band 7
IELTS Writing Task 1 Sample Band 7 | IELTS Letter Sample Band 7 (General Training)
7.0
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Overall Feedback
The letter addresses all the tasks and maintains a semi-formal tone. However, there are some grammatical errors and awkward phrasing. The coherence and cohesion are good, but the logical flow could be improved. Vocabulary usage is adequate but not very varied.
| Overall score | 7.0 | |
| Grammatical range and accuracy | 7.0 | |
| Lexical resource | 7.0 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 7.0 | |
| Task response | 6.0 |
| Total Errors | 13 | |
| Grammatical range and accuracy | 3 | |
| Lexical resource | 4 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 4 | |
| Task response | 2 |
Question
You are writing to your cousin to inform them about your upcoming retirement. Write a letter to them.
Explain your reasons for retiring
Discuss how you feel about this new phase
Suggest a get-together to celebrate
#Retirement Announcement
#Informal
Submitted Answer
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Paragraphs:7
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To my cousin, Karen
Hi Karen! How are you? I hope you're doing well. I'm so glad to tell you that I am retiring.
I'm now a mother of a newborn son, so I would
want
to focus on my son and his well-being. As a mother, I felt burdened to balance both my work and my personal life. On one hand, I want
to stay home with my son all day and spend time with him. But, on another hand, I love my job and I want
to help my husband bring in income into our household.To be honest, this was a really tough decision to
make
as I do enjoy my job. However, with the things going on in my personal life, I think I should focus more on my family. My husband has assured me that he is capable of bringing in income for our family, which made my decision-making less complex.Well, it does feel weird to stay at home all day, but, I feel like this early retirement will be great for our family as I could become the mother I've always desired to be
and
I would not have any stress regarding
anymore
.
I think we should meet up with each other to celebrate this news. Since I
want
to be with the ones I love when sharing my feelings towards my early retirement. I hope you can come and celebrate together with me. Nonetheless, thank you for always being there for me.Love, Bella