IELTS Writing Task 1 Sample Band 5

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IELTS Letter Sample Band 5

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03 Aug 24, 13:02
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The letter addresses the main points but lacks coherence and cohesion. Grammar and vocabulary usage need improvement, and the formality is not consistent with the expected semi-formal tone.

Overall score5.0
Grammatical range and accuracy5.0
Lexical resource5.0
Coherence & cohesion5.0
Task response4.0
Total Errors21
Grammatical range and accuracy7
Lexical resource4
Coherence & cohesion3
Task response6
Question
You want to apply for a scholarship to fund your studies. Write a letter to the scholarship committee.
Introduce yourself and your academic achievements
Explain why you need the scholarship
Describe how the scholarship will help you achieve your goals
#Study Plan
#Semi-Formal
Submitted Answer
English:US English
Words:156
Paragraphs:3
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Hi, my name is Nicole Tjandra
I'm
from Indonesia. I am a high school student, pursuing my degree at Monash University. I will be starting my BIM in Kanaan Cianjur. I came across this scholarship program through the platforms and got it from my school, I am a great fit for this program.
During my high school academic year, I maintained excellent academic with a GPA of 9.5 while taking on various internships and part-time jobs at Starbucks. These experiences opened my eyes to the world of industry and made me grow a dream to pursue this as a career in the future
Accordingly, I need this scholarship because I want to help my parents, for this reason, my parents
won't
be paying my university
and
it can save a lot of money for the future.
Also
i
hope when
i
get this
scolarship
i
can do my best in my
passion