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IELTS Writing Task 1 Sample Band 5.5 | IELTS Letter Sample Band 5.5 (General Training)

5.5
Overall Score
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The letter addresses the tasks but contains several grammatical errors and awkward phrasing. Coherence and cohesion are affected by unclear transitions and some irrelevant information. Lexical resource is adequate but could be more precise and varied.
Overall score5.5
Grammatical range and accuracy5.0
Lexical resource6.0
Coherence & cohesion5.0
Task response5.0
Total Errors20
Grammatical range and accuracy5
Lexical resource7
Coherence & cohesion3
Task response4
Question
You want to apply for a job at a travel agency. Write a letter to the agency manager.
State the job you are applying for
Explain why you are interested in the job
Describe your relevant experience and skills
#Job Application
#Formal
Submitted Answer
English:UK English
Words:253
Paragraphs:9
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Bullet Point Missing or Incomplete
Dear manager,
I hope this letter finds you well. The reason of writing this letter is to express my interests on the
job
at the
bookstore
, and to demonstrate my selling abilities regarding my C.V, which is important to
analyze
.
Firstly, my interest of this
job
arises from my appreciation towards the
books
, since I was kid, I have been reading many
books
from a grand variety of authors. Therefore, it would be a pleasure working around
books
and keep learning from them, moreover, I like recommending
books
to people who
don't
knows
what to read.
At this point I want to emphasize in my studies, I am graduated from Jose Allamano's Bilingual School. I finished the career of literature at Universidad Nacional de Colombia.
Furthermore
I completed a marketing short course, which is important to convince people to buy
books
besides of having a high efficiency in
sellings
.
Despite all my knowledge I do not have other references from
jobs
because of I
was recently
graduated, therefore,
this is my first
job
. Nevertheless, I can have a nesting necessary for approving my
job
. If I had the opportunity of applying this
job
, it would be an excellent advance for me and for my C.V.
Finally, in a very kindly way, I ask for a day and hour for my
job
interview, you can send me the information to my Gmail, which is attached to my C.V.
I hope you will consider my feedback,
Your sincerely,
Miguel Aguilera

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