IELTS Letter Checker - Sample Band 7.5
IELTS Writing Task 1 Sample Band 7.5 | IELTS Letter Sample Band 7.5 (General Training)
7.5
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09 Sept 24, 15:01
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Overall Feedback
The letter is well-structured and addresses all the bullet points effectively. The grammar is accurate and varied, and the vocabulary is appropriate, though it could be slightly more diverse. The coherence and cohesion are strong, but minor improvements could enhance the logical flow further.
| Overall score | 7.5 | |
| Grammatical range and accuracy | 6.0 | |
| Lexical resource | 8.0 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 8.0 | |
| Task response | 8.0 |
| Total Errors | 11 | |
| Grammatical range and accuracy | 4 | |
| Lexical resource | 3 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 3 | |
| Task response | 1 |
Question
You bought a mobile phone from a store, but it has some technical issues. Write a letter to the store manager.
Describe the technical issues with the mobile phone.
Explain how these problems are affecting you.
State what you would like the store to do to resolve the issue.
#Complaint Letter
#Formal
Submitted Answer
English:
Words:232
Paragraphs:9
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Dear Store Manager,
I am writing to express my dissatisfaction with the TechPro X2000 mobile phone I purchased from your store on 15th
August, 2023
. The device has been exhibiting several technical issues that have significantly impaired its functionality.The phone's battery
life
is alarmingly short, depleting within three hours of moderate use, far below the advertised
24-hour life
. Additionally, the touchscreen frequently becomes unresponsive, requiring multiple attempts to perform simple tasks. Lastly, the camera, supposedly a standout feature, produces blurry and pixelated images.These shortcomings have profoundly impacted my daily
life
and professional activities as a freelance photographer. The unreliable battery life
has led to missed calls and delayed responses to clients, potentially jeopardizing business opportunities. The unresponsive touchscreen causes frustration and wastes time, while the subpar camera quality forces me to carry an additional device for backup photography.Given the severity of these issues, I kindly request that your store takes immediate action. I would
appreciate
if you could either replace the faulty device with a new, fully functional TechPro X2000 that meets the advertised
specifications, or provide a full refund of the purchase price.I have been a loyal customer of your store for years and hope we can resolve this matter promptly and amicably. I look forward to your swift response and resolution of this issue.
Thank you for your attention to this matter.
Sincerely,
bibhu