IELTS Letter Checker - Sample Band 5
IELTS Writing Task 1 Sample Band 5 | IELTS Letter Sample Band 5 (General Training)
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Overall Feedback
The letter addresses the task but contains several grammatical errors and lacks a formal tone. Coherence and cohesion are affected by awkward phrasing and transitions, while vocabulary usage is limited and repetitive.
| Overall score | 5.0 | |
| Grammatical range and accuracy | 5.0 | |
| Lexical resource | 5.0 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 5.0 | |
| Task response | 5.0 |
| Total Errors | 20 | |
| Grammatical range and accuracy | 9 | |
| Lexical resource | 3 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 4 | |
| Task response | 3 |
Question
You want to apply for a bank loan to start a new business. Write a letter to the bank.
Introduce yourself and your business idea
Explain how the loan will be used
Provide any documents or information they might need
#Bank Loan
#Formal
Submitted Answer
English:
Words:230
Paragraphs:7
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Bullet Point Missing or Incomplete
Dear Sir/Madam
My name is John, and I am
a
investor who came from the United states
2 months ago. I was born in this city and after spending half of my life working in the foreign country I decided to come back to our hometown and care more about my family.I was working as an employee for the apparel section of an advertisement company for the past few years. During these few months living in this city, I found out the fashion are far behind the trend in the United States. I am planning to bring their styles and designs to our town.
I want to get
a loans
about 10000 for starting the first step of my business, first of all, I am going started with using social media to advertise my new shop. Its already Novermber now and 1 month later the Christmas are coming, I have made a few samples and talked
withsome
schools and unions, they are pretty satisfied with the quality and price of my products, but as the amount they needed are huge
i
have to buy more inventories and equipment to increase my production line.
For
you
conference, I followed the copies of my ID and the contracts I signed with the schools and unions. I hopes
these document
can improve the possibility to get
this loan.Yours
sincersly
Oliver