IELTS Letter Checker - Sample Band 6
IELTS Writing Task 1 Sample Band 6 | IELTS Letter Sample Band 6 (General Training)
6.0
Overall Score
28 Nov 24, 06:18
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Overall Feedback
The letter addresses all tasks but contains several grammatical errors and lacks variety in sentence structures. Vocabulary is adequate but could be more varied, and the coherence and cohesion could be improved with better transitions and organization.
| Overall score | 6.0 | |
| Grammatical range and accuracy | 5.0 | |
| Lexical resource | 6.0 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 6.0 | |
| Task response | 6.0 |
| Total Errors | 18 | |
| Grammatical range and accuracy | 9 | |
| Lexical resource | 5 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 3 | |
| Task response | 1 |
Question
You have seen an advertisement in a local newspaper for a part-time job at a bookstore. Write a letter to the bookstore manager.
Explain why you are interested in the job
Describe how your previous experience makes you a suitable candidate
Provide your availability for an interview
#Job Application
#Formal
Submitted Answer
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Words:224
Paragraphs:10
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Dear Sir/Madam,
I am writing to express
intention
to apply for a part-time job as a sales representative in your bookstore
. I saw the hiring post on Indeed.com and since I am currently looking for a job while I have a lot of vacant time after my in school. I have read the qualifications you need and
I am confident that I would be able to perfom
my task well.I had my experience back in my country as a saleslady in a big department store; we call it SM Department Store in the Philippines. I was assigned in both men and women clothing section. I know department
store
and bookstore
are different however,
I have many transferrable skills
both soft and technical skills. I would be able to work under less suprvision
, I am eager to learn new things, and I know how to communicate well both to
the customers and to
my co-workers.Below is my work availability:
Mondays and Thursdays - 8:00 am until 12:00 pm
Saturdays and Sundays - 8:00 am until 5:00 pm
And here is my phone number 226-503-2395 and my email address is abaggrace09@yahoo.com
and
I am available anytime for interview.Thank you for reading my application. I hope to hear from you soon.
Yours faithfully,
Grace