IELTS Writing Task 1 Sample Band 6
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IELTS Letter Sample Band 6
6.0
Overall Score
14 Jul 24, 12:27
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Overall Feedback
The letter addresses all the bullet points but has several grammatical errors and awkward phrasing. Coherence and cohesion are adequate, but the letter could be more logically organized. Vocabulary is appropriate but lacks variety.
| Overall score | 6.0 | |
| Grammatical range and accuracy | 6.0 | |
| Lexical resource | 6.0 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 6.0 | |
| Task response | 5.0 |
| Total Errors | 16 | |
| Grammatical range and accuracy | 4 | |
| Lexical resource | 6 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 3 | |
| Task response | 2 |
Question
You are applying for a position as an accountant at a financial firm. Write a letter to the firm's HR manager.
Express your interest in the position
Detail your relevant experience and qualifications
Mention your availability for an interview
#Job Application
#Formal
Submitted Answer
English:
Words:204
Paragraphs:6
Readability
Coherence
Cohesion
Vocabulary Usage
Grammar Range
Logical Flow
Bullet Point Missing or Incomplete
Dear Mr. Andrew,
I am writing this letter to express my interest
on
applying for a position as an accountant at the financial firm
. I am really
interested on
being an accountant at the firm
and I believe with my experiences I could increase the firm
's income and be committed to the job. I'm
currently studying as an undergraduate student at the Oxford University and taking the finance major as my main subject. My job experiences was being a finance manager at the Sony Company about 3 years, and I left due to wanting to expand my knowledge in other companies.I believe that from those 3 years experience, I have
learnt
a lot considering that Sony Company is a top company for technologies and others. Personally, I am also willing to help with other tasks that you would assign to me and I will complete it on-time right on the deadline. I am currently available on Monday, 23 June at 10:00 a.m for the interview and I hope you will consider taking me in to the firm
.I hope that you will reply to my
letter
and I wish you an amazing
day ahead! Thank you!From,
Elaine