IELTS Writing Task 1 Sample Band 6

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IELTS Letter Sample Band 6

6.0
Overall Score
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The letter addresses all the bullet points but contains several grammatical errors and awkward phrasing. The coherence and cohesion are adequate, but the vocabulary usage is somewhat limited and repetitive.

Overall score6.0
Grammatical range and accuracy6.0
Lexical resource6.0
Coherence & cohesion6.0
Task response5.0
Total Errors16
Grammatical range and accuracy4
Lexical resource7
Coherence & cohesion3
Task response2
Question
You have seen an advertisement in a local newspaper for a part-time job at a bookstore. Write a letter to the bookstore manager.
Explain why you are interested in the job
Describe how your previous experience makes you a suitable candidate
Provide your availability for an interview
#Job Application
#Formal
Submitted Answer
English:UK English
Words:186
Paragraphs:7
Readability
Coherence
Cohesion
Vocabulary Usage
Grammar Range
Logical Flow
Bullet Point Missing or Incomplete
Dear Manager,
I am writing this letter
you
to express my interest in the part-time job at your
bookstore
. I found about this particular position in
Sunday
newspaper, also one of my friends who used to visit your
bookstore
suggested as well. I am very enthusiast about books and I believe that working in a related field will help me to
fulfill
my personal desires. In fact, this is the ideal job role for me to overcome with knowledge and wisdom.
I have worked as an Accountant at one of the popular
bookstore
called Matha Books at Southern cross, Melbourne since 2019
and
I have undertaken certain duties and responsibilities over the years. Although, I have encountered some specific tasks including implementation of digital marketing platforms towards customers as well as
maintaing
technological aspects .
Nevertheless, I am available during weekdays from 9 am to 2 pm for an interview to discuss further. I hope that you will contact me soon to inform about the date and time for this
amazing
opportunity. I look forward to hearing from you soon.
Thank you,
Kind regards
Shehan Kaldera.