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7.5
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07 Apr 25, 13:37
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The response provides a clear overview of the trends in fitness activities in Tokyo, with accurate data interpretation. However, the coherence could be improved by better structuring the information, and the lexical range could be expanded to include more varied vocabulary.
Overall score7.5
Grammatical range and accuracy8.0
Lexical resource7.0
Coherence & cohesion7.0
Task response7.0
Total Errors8
Grammatical range and accuracy2
Lexical resource2
Coherence & cohesion3
Task response1

Writing Task

#Sports and Recreation
#Line Chart
Interpret the participation trends in different fitness activities in Tokyo from 2010 to 2020.
Outline the trends for each fitness activity.
Highlight any significant fluctuations or changes.
Compare the participation rates at the start and end of the period.

Submitted Answer

Words175|Paragraphs3
English:UK English
Global Issues:
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Grammar Range
Logical Flow
Tokyo has exhibited an evolving interest
of
various fitness activities which can be
showed
by the given table. The data displays citizens' participation in these exercises from 2010 to 2020.
From the table, it is apparent that "Gym Workouts" is consistently the most popular type of fitness activity throughout the decade. Although we can observe that its prevalence fluctuated within 2012 to 2018, it was nevertheless successful in reaching its peak of 38 units in 2020. "Aerobics" comes in second with a relatively more stable growth trend from 2010 despite seeing a minor dip in 2016. A similar pattern can be seen for "Swimming" which also experienced a minor decline in 2016 before recovering afterward. Jogging, however, saw a decrease in participation when every other exercise seemed to be rising in popularity in the year, 2018.
Yet, despite these erratic trends, all exercise types seem to have grown at the same amount of 8 units from 2010 to 2020. Additionally, the four fitness activities still maintain the same ranking in terms of participation in Tokyo.

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