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The response provides a general overview of the temperature trends but lacks detailed analysis and specific data points. Grammar and vocabulary are adequate, though there are some inaccuracies and limited variety in sentence structures.
| Overall score | 6.0 | |
| Grammatical range and accuracy | 6.0 | |
| Lexical resource | 6.0 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 6.0 | |
| Task response | 5.0 |
| Total Errors | 12 | |
| Grammatical range and accuracy | 4 | |
| Lexical resource | 3 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 3 | |
| Task response | 2 |
Question
The line chart shows the annual average temperature changes in four different cities from 2000 to 2010.
Describe the overall trend in temperature changes for each city.
Identify any years with significant temperature fluctuations.
Compare the temperature trends among the four cities.
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Submitted Answer
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This diagram contains information about the
yearly
average
temperature from 2000 to 2010 in four different areas, which is
New York, London, Tokyo, and Sydney.Overall, the four different cities mentioned had steady and constantly increasing
average
temperature, no matter where they are in the earth. The hottest city in all years on the graph shown is Sydney, followed by Tokyo, New York, and London in a decreasing order.In the year 2000, compared to the other cities, London has the lowest recorded
average
temperature with approximately 11 degree Celcius and throughout the next 10 years, was still the coldest cities with only achieving around 13 degree Celcius. However, the average
yearly temperature in London only has risen dramatically from 2004 compared to other cities. Throughout the years, Sydney still has the highest temperature relative to all the cities below, with around 18 degree
in the beginning and only has risen for about 2 degree. New York and Tokyo also have similar change with Sydney, which is very steady compared to London,.